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The young girl grasped her sword. Her breathing became shallow, unsteady. She tried to lift herself from the floor. Every attempt ended in failure. As she glanced up, peering through her fallen hair, she saw a pair of heels advancing toward her. She tried to crawl away, but these heels were faster, the owner still possessing full strength. The heels made contact with her beaten side, forcing her body back across the ornate floor. She coughed, gasping for lost air.
The owner of the heels stared down at the beaten girl. “Tell me Little Bird, what do you hope to achieve?” She walked at leisure towards a limp body. “To think that Dragon Boy couldn’t handle me.” She leaned down with grace, hair cascading over her shoulders. She grabbed him by the collar and lifted him with ease. “He would have made a fine knight for me.” She looked him over, measuring his worth. “Perhaps even king.” She scoffed. “King? And rule over me?” Four wings erupted from her back. She tossed the limp male at the defeated girl.
She watched as her comrade fell beside her. Her eyes caught a glimpse of his chest rising and falling. She reached out to him, but her opponent was faster. She grabbed the girl by her long black hair, she glared at her, her eyes searing into her shaking body.
“Tell me Little Bird, how much does he mean to you?” She released her hair, dropping her to the floor once again.
She extended her arm and released a scream. A sword protruded from her palm. She clenched the hilt as she placed the blade above the boy’s chest. “Tell me how much he means to you!” She brought the sword down.
The girl released a cry. Wings sprouted from her back. Wings gave to flight, allowing her the speed she needed. The enemy pierced through flesh. The girl cried out and fell limp near the boy.
She had trouble breathing, her heart couldn’t keep pace, her mind slowed, light gave way to darkness.
The four winged being laughed. “You could have just said so, Little Bird!”
The girl tried to reach for the sword buried in her. Her fingers shook, but could not find the strength to hold it. There was no strength left in her.
“Rise, Dragon Boy.”
The boy stood and kneeled before his queen.
“Useless, Little Bird.” She stroked his chin. “Such actions will get you nowhere.”
The girl couldn’t hold on any longer and eventually blacked out.
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57 - Sacrifice

Of course the first thing that came to my mind was a certain pair.
I tried so hard not use names, but its obvious who they are if you know me.
Using no names and only pronouns isn't an easy task, especially when you have two of the same gender.
But I'm rather proud of this one.

Is it me or do I keep ending things on a downer...? ^^;
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i have no idea who the characters (or pair) are, but i still think it's really, really good. i like writing without names (mainly because i can never come up with any good ones :) ). i just really, really like it (fight scenes are awesome in general).
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~MegumiTierana Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
^^ thank you

yeah the characters in this piece are original characters from a story I have been writing with a friend for 10 years. I try my best not to write about them, to try get other story ideas out of my head. But since they are a big part of my life, I tend to always write about them in some way.
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i know what you mean. i've spent the past year writng a story/book/novel thing (i finished it just last month) and the characters just keep popping up everywhere for me. I can't imagine what it would be like to write the same thing for 10 years... what are their names?
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~MegumiTierana Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
ooh, congrats on that ^^

it can be fun and it can be hell
as each year progresses something gets changed, re-invented, etc
(but I'm sure you know that lol)
and this year he and I finally said ok, we need a time line...

The characters in the piece are Ryo Atsuko (Dragon Boy), Megumi Tierana (Little Bird), and Tsunario (one with heels)
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thank you :)

i know what you mean. i'll probably end up going over the whole thing this summer, changing tonnes of stuff. a time line is a good idea.

What's your story about?

I like Tsunario - it sounds cool, sort of rolls off the tounge, and she has awesome wings :)
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~MegumiTierana Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
as my prof said, there is no such thing as a final draft
you're always going to find something you wished you changed, edited, etc

in a nutshell ~
two destined people are to defeat an evil
the two being Megumi and Ryo, the evil being Tsunario
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i know what you mean. also - you are your own worst critic and (almost) always feel that you can do better.

sounds cool. is it sort of fantasy type or something else?
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~MegumiTierana Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
oh yes o.o so harsh on myself

yep yep fantasy
magic, dragons, races other than human, ^^
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